Week 5 free entry #1

This is the sonnet that we did in class on tuesday. I though it was a very fun activity. It caused us to think on the spot, and also it was exciting to hear how the poem turned out in the end. This was the result of the project.

Collaborated force

(Orginal)

Created by the pressure of the Earth

Broken under the weight

An aggressive force holds us together

But still small atoms tear us apart

Apart like the orange from the healthy white

But still similar to the green from a plant

The fire, the nonsense will quickly bring down

The frighten but fearless woman above

Who knows courage has fear but in spite of

All that I still wanted to try for you

Uncomfortable and new, but why not?

Maybe I will turn blue like the ocean.

As I hold my breath and wait for release

(Revised)

Created by the pressure of the Earth

Broken under the weight

An aggressive force holds us together

Yet, still small atoms tear us apart,

Apart like the orange from the healthy white

Similar like the greenness on a plant

Like fire, nonsense will quickly burn down,

the frighten but fearless woman above

Who knows courage, can have fears, In spite of

All that I wanted to try for with you. Yes,

uncomfortable and new, but why not?

Maybe I will turn blue like the ocean.

As I hold my breath and wait for release